It’s time for a 100-word story, brought to you by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, our wonderful host for Friday Fictioneers. Each week, we are challenged to write a 100-word story based on a photo prompt. Thanks to J. Hardy Carroll for this week’s photo.
All are welcome to participate. Give it a try.
(100 words)
The Doctor is “In”
She imagined the water mark in the corner lengthening, a slithering eel frothing about in the mealy ceiling, its fangs lashing out at her. A twinge ripped at her neck. It would take her into the wall and turn her into nothingness. Disappearing. That she could take.
But the stab of a knife into delicate flesh or a noose cutting into your neck, trapping your last breath. Physical pain was something she could never wrap her head around.
“Josh,” she said. Her three o’clock always sat in the same corner. “How are you?”
“Fine. And you?”
“Just fine. Thank you.”
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Lol…. When I’m bored I often make pictures out of shadows
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Ha. Like animals in the clouds. Hopefully, none were coming to eat you or anything like that.
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She is his psychiatrist or therapist and unbeknownst to all she is more disturbed than he is. Very well crafted, Amy. I hope his appointment goes well and she gets some help too!
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Yes, that’s it. Right on the nose. Thank you, Perry. I think she’s clever at hiding it, too, so I hope someone notices or she seeks help. Great comment.
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oh well, i wonder if a visit to the dentist would evoke the same feeling. 🙂
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Personally, I’m not happy at the dentist. Mostly, it’s the sounds I have trouble with. The drilling and such… 🙂
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Physician heal thyself! I had to read this twice to understand the chilling meaning
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Thank you, Neil! And thanks for taking the time to read it twice. I appreciate that.
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She needs a bit of self-help! Nice one Amy
‘Joy’ a very short story!
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I think so, Keith. Thanks so much.
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The alternative meaning of course is that she’s temporarily crazy and bored and can’t give any more to her “3 o’clock”. I’ve been there but I have much more mundane fantasies like sprouting wings and flying away out the window or lying on a beach somewhere hot (oh ya that one came true). Great piece Amy.
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I like your alternative meaning. The mind wanders sometimes. Who can control it when you’re bored! Haha. I love your fantasies, especially since they can become true! Yay for you. Thanks, Tracey.
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Such delicious writing, fab 🙂
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Thanks so much, Helen. 🙂
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I get that way if I’m waiting for that ill-fated meeting with my boss! That’s when I want my name legally changed to “sweet thing.” He can say to me, “You’re fired, sweet thing.”
Good stuff, Amy, as usual. Five out of five Bobbitt Worms.
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Ha. You’re funny. I hope things don’t come to that with your boss. Bobbitt Worms…gads! Not they’re disturbing, are they not? They fit right in with my story. You so very thoughtful, Kent. Thank you!
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Someone posted a video of a Bobbitt Worm on Facebook and it might be making the rounds near your page. It hides under the silt in the sea and snatches fish and cuts them in half and eats them. Not really disturbing (to me) since they are small and might try to swallow your big toe, but they’d choke on it, probably. They look like those ear worms on Star Trek II: The Wrath of Khan.
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I’ll look for the video. I saw some pictures! They are said to be one of the ocean’s most disturbing predators…so I read. I find them pretty fascinating, but not so pretty. 🙂 Yes, just like The Wrath of Khan. I agree.
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Love these 100 word stories. When I looked at the photo, I thought of someone waiting to catch a train for a new life, leaving a past behind… isn’t it wonderful how our minds (and stories) are different? I like your story! -Jennie-
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Thanks so much, Jennie. That’s what I love about doing these stories. It’s amazing how many different kinds of stories can come out of one prompt! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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I did, and you are so right! 🙂
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I wonder what kind of prescription drugs she’s hooked on. No wonder medical mishaps are the number two cause of death in America.
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Indeed, it is a serious problem, Russell. Sometimes, I think they do more harm than good.
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Great imagery! I always wonder what my therapist is REALLY thinking about when I am talking… ha ha ha ha ha!! 🙂
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Yes, Courtney!! I have often wondered the same thing. Like, are they really listening or is their mind wandering off…to dark places.
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It sounds to me like she should be sitting in the patient’s chair 🙂
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You could be right, Ali. Or, at the very least, she needs a vacation. Thanks.
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I’ll wonder now if that’s what my doc is thinking next time I see her (I hope not) 😉
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I hope not, too. That would not be very helpful! Haha. Thanks, Dianne.
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I wonder if she has to deal with patients who have a violent history and doesn’t really want to face it. You create a dreamy and uncomfortable atmosphere. Great writing.
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Could be. I think it would be difficult to avoid in this line of work. Thank you, Gah! That’s so very nice of you to say.
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Who shall be the Doctor’s doctor… I do think that she might need herself a lot. That fear of pain seems close to phobia…. I love the image of her fantasies, there is something so beautiful in the disturbing.
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Thank you, Bjorn, for the insightful comment. There is something so beautiful in the disturbing…Maybe it’s the purity of it or the rawness.
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My gracious. I wonder if her patients give her ideas. Lol
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It’s possible. Thanks, Dawn.
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The doctor may be in, but I suspect she’s really out. Well out. Again, I had to read it twice, but full marks for originality.
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Thanks, Sandra. I thought this might kind of sneak on people. Wasn’t sure though. Thanks for taking the time to read it twice! And for the nice thoughts.
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Finally caught up with several months of writing! Loved the stories – you are a delight to follow Amy 🙂
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Wow, you’re so kind. Thanks for all the support you give me! You’re too good to me. I appreciate all the reads and comments. Thank you, thank you!!!
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My pleasure 🙂
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I love that first line of description, Amy. What a picture. Sounds like this doctor needs one of her own.
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Thanks so much, David. I’m glad you liked that. I think a doctor’s opinion wouldn’t hurt.
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I fear to think how many psychiatrists and therapists are as disturbed as or more than their patients. That was a great surprise twist at the end, Amy. Well written. —- Suzanne
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It makes me wonder. I think she would make for an interesting character, in any case. There’s a lot to work with there. I hope it isn’t so, but I think people are attracted to what they fear sometimes. Thank you, Suzanne. Glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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I got a chill as I read those last lines. It is a scary thought to imagine a therapist, so clearly in need of their own medicine. Very well done, Amy. I got it on the first reading, and read it again for the sheer thrill of it. 😉
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Oh, great! I know it was kind of twisty at the end. I’m happy you could follow it. You never know how your story will be received since it makes perfect sense to you. 🙂 Thank you so much, Dawn! xo
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I can’t tell you how many times I hit send, and then wonder… who will see what in this? (Of course, that was truer, when I was actually writing more!! )
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I feel that way A LOT!! What will they think of this. Someone always thinks of something I never thought about! Me too…the writing has been slow lately. 😦
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That eel is terrifying – slithering and frothing!. And what is it about that word mealy? I love the switch to the, How are you? Quite a journey in 100 words.
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Oh, thank you! What wonderful comments you leave me. Mealy is simply a yucky word, isn’t it?? It’s that kind of word you feel in your mouth. I’m pleased you liked my story. 🙂
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